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PART 5
The Butler Disengaged
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This was a dream.  It was the only explanation for all of it.
I did not have a fever.
The weather was not horrid.
I was not awake, rather, lying asleep in bed.
Grell Sutcliff was not standing in front of me.

As the rain beat against my face, the wind chilling my body to the core, there was only one thing I could feel: the anger and hurt I felt for the man standing before me, upon the ledge of my balcony.  The man who single-handedly destroyed one of the last pieces of my normal life.
Every time I saw him and his disgusting grin, it made me sick to my stomach.
Without even thinking, I spoke, my feelings overwhelming me too much.

"What business do you have here, Shinigami?  What do you want this time?"  I knew that he wasn't truly a man, but a reaper of death.  Sent to judge and take lives of the people on Earth.  However, the one time that he stepped from his path, disregarding his job and attaching himself to a human, he ended up corrupting her, allowing her divine judgement to become tainted with the crimson blood spilled on his behalf.  All in all he plucked her from the crowd, led her astray and ended up painting her a new colour of red, one of which had never been seen before.

"Ahh child, fear not.  Your time is still not up...  I planned to avoid confrontation actually.  To sneak into your humble abode without notice and to find something very precious to me."  He jumped from the ledge, the lengthy tail of his coat fluttering gracefully behind him as he did so.

"What of mine could you possibly want so desperately?"  I knew of one thing and one thing only that he could have wanted and it annoyed me greatly.  It was the same bloody thing.  Every.  Single.  Time.

"Oh, you know..."  A blush spread across his face before he started to giggle uncontrollably like a derranged female.  It kind of reminded me of another young lady that I knew...

I shuddered at the thought, the current situation being a big enough headache without adding another imbecile to the mix.

"That is out of the question, Grell.  I'm afraid that particular item is not up for grabs.  As you well know it never has nor ever will be.  It belongs to me and me alone, right until the very end."  Pouting, he crossed his arms, the arm of his coat slipping down his right shoulder.

"But that's not fair!"  He whined, irking me even more.
"Little boys need to learn how to share!  You're just a spoilt little bra-"  He's cut off mid-sentence as my elbow connects with his gut, a pleasant sound emitting from his mouth as he falls to his knees.

"I'm sorry, the word 'share' isn't in the English Phantomhive dictionary.  Now get the bloody hell off of my property before I call for Sebastian to remove you."  His eyes lit up and as though I had never hurt him, he raised his arms into the air in excitement.

"KYAAAHHH!  SEBASTIAN!  Where is he?  I want to see him!  If it were him kicking me out of the house I'd have absolutely no problem with that whatsoever!"  He had totally planned on me saying that.  How utterly annoying that I have to deal with a being full of such prestidigitation.

Glaring at Grell all the while, my lips move, a faint whisper falling from my mouth with the drops of rain that preceeded it.
"Sebastian...  Come to me."  No less that five seconds later did I hear the door click and feel the warmth of material.  A soft, black coat had been draped over my shoulders.

"Bocchan, you'll catch your death out here!  Let us get insi-"  The only thing that I remember seeing was a flash of red before hearing a rather loud grunt.  He had reached out to touch me before he was knocked back against the glass panes of the door, his body slipping down to the ground.

"SEBBY!!  My darling Sebastian, it has been ever so long since our last encounter!  How I have longed to feel your body against mine once mo-"  It all happens too fast for my eyes but I hear another loud noise, a thud, before a sickening crack and see Sebastian back on his feet, cushioning his hand in his other, staring at the bloody mess he had made on the floor, the wall of the balcony cracked somewhat.

"Grell Sutcliff, please refrain from acting and saying such things around myself and the young master...  It's unseemly and quite frankly, disgusting."  Brushing himself down he turned to me and I could see his mouth part open as if he were about to speak but before his words could come out he was interrupted once more by a sore looking Grell who was currently nursing his abdomen.

"Bassy, my love, stop acting so coy around the child.  Just because he does know about true love does not mean you should shield him from it!"  The pervert had proceeded in squeezing himself in between my butler and myself, his arms tightly woven around Sebastian's left arm.  He had started to manically giggle to himself again and I could see Sebastian's eyes beginning to glow.
"You're so warm Sebastian.  You're making me so warm!"  And he could say that so easily standing next to the half naked teenager, dripping with rain water!?  I swore to myself, if Sebastian didn't do something about this tumour soon I was personally going to take matters into my own hands.  Not that I could feel my own hands...
"I can't take all this closeness anymore!  Kiss me Sebastian!"  No sooner had his lips puckered did Sebastian strike once again, this time with a fist to Grell's face, Grell ending up in the same place as he had landed previously, this time with a rather bloody looking nose.
"UWAHH!  Why do you always go for the face, Sebby darling?  My beautiful face..."  He stands up, palming his bloody face in his hands.

"You have been asked repeatedly to remove yourself from the premisis and have, so far, failed to do so.  I'm afraid that next time I won't be so nice."  His eyes were glowing a deep crimson now and I realised that he had moved closer to me.

"Ahh, but I used to be so welcome here.  Alas no more.  I at least thought you would have missed me."  He sighed and dusted himself before hopping nimbly up onto the part of the balcony that currently wasn't broken from his and Sebastian's small ruckus.
"Parting with you always makes me so sad.  I had hoped that we wouldn't part on such bittersweet terms."  He pressed his spectacles up his nose and smirked, despite his obvious discomfort from Sebastian's blows.
"Though, I should inform you that I shall be returning in the near future, you can count on that.  But this time my visit will not be so leisurely.  It will be pertaining to the young master there."  He grinned creepily and I felt a wave of fear wash over me briefly.

"What are you talking about Grell?  Explain yourself!"  I took a step forward towards him and he raised his hand, shaking his finger at me.

"All in due time... My Lord..."  Emphasis being heavily inflicted on the last two words of that sentence.  He bowed and blew a kiss to Sebastian (who I felt flinch aside me) before he jumped back, jumping over the ledge, his voice wavering into nothing as he fell to the ground below.
"All in due time!"  And with that he disappeared into the darkness.

"My Lord, what are your orders?"  I did not speak for a moment, his words resonating in my head.

"I..."  A fresh wave of emotion came crashing down upon me, this time it hit me hard and before I knew what was happening, I had collapsed in Sebastian's forever-waiting arms.
"Bed."

His arms wrap around my waist, hoisting me once again into his arms, not caring that he was getting drenched from both the rain and my body.

"Your entire body is shaking young master.  Please let me prepare for you a hot beverage.  A warm glass of milk perhaps?"  I grip onto his shirt and press myself against his chest, shuddering harder as I only just realised exactly how cold I had actually become.

I could see the drops of water dripping down his face, his perfect hair, which was still perfect, soaked to the scalp.  I wrapped my arms around his neck, the need for warmth heightening.

"Let me dress you my Lord.  I need you to stay warm else I fear you may take ill."  He pulled some sheets from my desk and experthandedly managed both my body and the sheets together, wrapping my me in the thick material  Placing me on the bed, he proceeded in drying my hair with the sheets, drying my skin soon after.  Within minutes he had almost completely dried me and had slipped my nightdress over my head before tucking me tightly under the covers.

"I shall prepare for you a glass of warm milk, bocchan, and then-"  He's cut short, in shock no doubt.  He glances down and finds my hand clenched tightly around the base of his tailcoat.

"Please I..."  I pause and sigh, letting go of the material of his coat.  Stop being so bloody pathetic Ciel.
"I want you to stay with me."

"But my Lord, if you just have a warm drink-"  He's cut short yet again, this time because I shout at him.

"Sebastian, do not disobey me!  I order you to stay with me!  Get in my bloody bed and keep me warm!"  I blush at the request and my outburst and feel a little saddened when he's silent for a few moments and I actually begin to believe that he is actually going to ignore my orders.  He blows the candles out and the darkness consumed the room.
"Sebastian, you-"  This time it's me cut short as my butler cuts me off, the bed dipping and his warm body pressing against mine.  I shudder at the contact, desperately hoping that he doesn't realise but then I realise that I'm still shaking, my body still cold from the extensive submission to the extreme wind and rain.

"Yes, my Lord..."  Whimpering at how close he is to me, I clench my eyes shut, willing sleep to take me so that the humiliation of my butler sharing such closeness with me can pass quicker.

I feel his warm breath on the back of my neck and it calms me somewhat, relaxing my tense muscles, halting my bodily spasms.
Fairly soon I had calmed down but now I was faced with a new problem.  My face had begun to radiate heat at an alarming rate, my breathing somewhat erratic.
It was because I was unwell.  That was the only explanation for it.  Nothing else could cause me to react this way.
Nothing.

Eventually I had completely relaxed, drowsiness taking over.

"Never leave me Sebastian..."

"...Until the very end, my Lord."  That was the last thing I remember hearing before falling into a deep slumber.



...to be continued...
Okay, so I am SEVERELY warey about this add...
I APOLOGISE if Grell is not up to your standards, but I don't know enough about him to write him properly.. Just bear with me, hokaii?

This chapter is dedicated to everyone who reads, comments and favourites. You all make me so happy <3

Kuroshitsuji/Black Butler & all characters mentioned (c) Yana Toboso
This story (c) me
The image was drawn by me: [link]

Prologue - [link]
Page 4 - [link]
Part 6 - [link]
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The writing style to this piece is beautifully done, not to mention the fantastic word choice and spelling is perfect to a fault! I love the detailed words and how they flow off the tongue (So well in fact I started reading aloud half-way through without even noticing) and the bittersweet cliffhanger only making me giddy to read more.

Your technique (even with cannon characters that do not belong to you) is smooth and well worded, coming out as the character would say- unlike most which force the cannon to become OOC so much that you shudder and turn away from the screen just to stop your eyes from scanning the horrid page.

The entire thing made me shiver and flush at times, giggling to myself in a fan-girlish sort of way - nodding in agreement or even yelling at my screen at a Grell for being the creeper he is. It's wonderful to have this feeling again since the last time I experienced it was in a Novel (House of Night) and that was a good year ago. Thank-you for the feeling.


A beautifully written piece any Kuroshitsuji SebastianxCiel fan should read.
I do believe I've fallen in love with how you write =PoynterJones. :love:
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GIMME-SOME-ONIONS Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
SO GOOD! SEBACIEL FOREVER!  <3
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xJuviaxGrayx Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
OMG I ONLY READ THE TOP PART YET BUT I TOTALY GEUSSED IT ITS GRELL!
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Sarebear16 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2013  Student General Artist
woooo!!!!!
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yasminload63 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's not kuroshitsuji with out grell
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audrey400 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012
i take it ur not a very big grell fan?
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kyocatlover Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2012
i love this it is so awsome!
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InnocentsV Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
in kuroshitsuji i was aware that Grell was a woman or was i mistaken?
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PoynterJones Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012
Grell is all male. :)
He is just extremely effeminate.
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InnocentsV Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
oh okay thank you for clearing that up
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GodBlessTheDucks Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I LOVE THIS STORY! The end is probably my favorite part!
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PoynterJones Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2011
Thank you! <3 There is a part 6, I don't know if you've read it or not?
And I'm going to be uploading part 7 pretty soon ^_^
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Abracadabagail Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
omfg!!!!!! THAT WAS SOOOOO AMAZING! I WAS SUCKED INTO READING THIS FROM THE FIRST PART! U r amazing at writing. what I great story. can't wait for part 6!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!
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animeangel654 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
rotflmao when grell got punched in the face again!! lol!!
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ColdHeartedCupid Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome as always
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ChelseyTehe Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
I've been waiting for a month!!! D: So when is the next one coming? =D
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PoynterJones Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
I'm really sorry >.<
I've had the next add ready for about a month but I can't post it.. I'm not having a great time at the moment... :(
I'll try and get it up as soon as I feel ready.
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mhwritten Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2011
i love your story. i can't wait for part 6!
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PoynterJones Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
Thank you so much.. I'll try to get the next part up as soon as I can.
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TainTedxLolliPoP Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Can i please have part six now Nee-san >.<
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PoynterJones Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
I hope you don't hate me. :(
I've had such a fucking horrid time at home and I've not been able to get it up. :( <3
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TainTedxLolliPoP Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
No i promise im not mad, ive been busy too :) dun worry. ill wait as long as i gotta ^^
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PoynterJones Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
I'm glad <3
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HoldMyAchingHeart Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww! I love this! Please, do keep writing! And thank you for the wonderful story that shall now be added to me favorites! :D
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PoynterJones Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011
Thank you so much!
Your comment has really made me happy ^_^
I hope that I continue to write up to your expectations ^_^ <3
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HoldMyAchingHeart Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You've had no problem keeping up with my expectations thus far. I am sure your next instalment will be just as good if not better! And I'm glad I could make you happy! :D You are welcome.
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furamara1 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011
oooh i love this
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PoynterJones Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011
Thank you very much ^_^
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MoonChild145 Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for making my week!! Looking foreward to number six :D :shamrock: best of luck
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PoynterJones Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011
Awh, I'm so glad that I've made your week! ^.^

Hopefully I'll not be too long with it <3
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Six-Foot-Two Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2011
awesome!
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PoynterJones Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011
Thank you ^.^
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ciel13sebastian Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011
PLEASE POST THE REST OF THE STORY ASAP!!!
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PoynterJones Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011
I need to write it first, haha.
Having a bit of difficulty at home.. I'll try to update as quick as I can :)
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ciel13sebastian Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011
ok.
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diandianne Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011
Woahhh :O that was amazing! I would love to have your skills! :heart: Keep writing! These are amazing!!
Suspense is gonna drive me crazy 0.0 !! jdhbgdahpi... amazing! :love:
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PoynterJones Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011
awh, thank you!
Thaat really means a lot for you to say that!
and don't put yourself down! I'm sure if you try then you can write awesome if you try :)

Haha, I'll try to update as soon as possible.. Having a few problems >.<
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Tainira Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Wonderfully written! ^.^
You have picked up the theme of Kuroshitsuji splendidly, and elaborated on the characters in a very realistic way, though you don't know them all too well yet. (as you've written in the description. ;p)
Your grammar's perfect too, as far as I can see, and your writing style (and the way you put yourself into Ciel's mind) couldn't fit better. :clap:

The only room for improvement I spot, is that you should be more careful about using the same word twice in a sentence, such as "actually,....actually" or "still,....still", and maybe you could write in an a bit more "old fashioned" style. But of course that's up to you.

None the less, it's a lovely story so far, and I simply can't wait for part 6! :w00t:
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PoynterJones Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011
Ahhh this comment.. <3

It's only really Grell that I wasn't too sure on. I kind of know the other characters a little bit better :D
But it's still difficult to maintain it throughout the entire story >.<
Ahh I still have grammar problems sometimes! xD

And yee, you know something, that is one thing that I normally try to keep under control. When I write it's one of the things that I ALWAYS try not to do and I always end up doing it ^^;
I hate repeating myself and to be honest, I wasn't aware that I was doing it xD
and when you say old fashioned, do you mean the way in which they speak to each other?

Thank you again!
And hopefully I'll have Part 6 up fairly soon.. Having a few difficulties. >.<
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Tainira Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You got Grell quite right, except that he's (at least in the anime) a little more of a comical rather than a frightening character. He has his silly Sebastian-obsessed side in here as well, but after watching the anime, I have a hard time trying to imagine him as a terrifying, bloody death reaper, who would even scare the :trollface: out of Ciel Phantomhive.
None the less, he actually appears more credible to his title of shinigami in this version. I think he's a little too much of the "fanservice-character" in the anime after all. ;P

Yeah, repetitions easily slips when writing. x3
I didn't think of it as a big deal in this piece though, but it's a shame at times when repetitions makes a rather good sentence sound odd... :hmm:

When I said old fashioned, I mostly referred too Ciel's thoughts. I don't know why but while reading Ciel's explanations, I sometimes got the feeling that the old English style was kinda off. It was as he seemed more like a modern teenager of our century...
Their term of speaking seemed perfect though. Especially Sebastian was... enchantingly realistic in all ways. :heart:
But while writing as Ciel, you must do your best to be completely in-character. He's the most important, since he's supposed to be both the main-character and the narrator of the story.
You must really picture yourself in front of an old desk with ink and a quill in candle light. It's not that Ciel seems OOC in your story at all, but with a little effort, he could be even MORE realistic. :#1:

And please take the time you need to finish the next part. People want to read a neat and detailed piece of work rather than something rushed. ;P
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doldendraco14 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
No mistakes that I can see! :la:

This is easily my favourite part of the story now. Generally, I don't actually like Grell that much 'cause he gets on my nerves, but I must admit you got his personality dead on in this. I've never really seen you make ANY character OOC, which is an amazing feat alone, but then when you add in the fact that you write it in such a captivating way you simply become the best writer I know. Detail is top notch once again, and as someone else said you do use the most perfect words to portray what you want to say. And this fluffy-wuffy chapter just BEGS for more to written, and I know that it will come with even more SebCiel awesomeness.

And a side note; if Ciel dies, Sebastian will actually murder you. And then I'll murder your dead body. Just sayin'.

Vision: :star::star::star::star::star-empty:
Originality: :star::star::star::star::star-empty:
Technique: :star::star::star::star::star:
Impact: :star::star::star::star::star-half:
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PoynterJones Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2011
Ahaha, I love this comment so much <3
Thank you so much for critiquing, it really makes me happy ^_^
I try my best NOT to go too OOC if I can help it.

AND LOL! You'll just have to wait and see what is going to happen with Ciely.. Uhuh. :P
My lips are sealed ;P <3
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doldendraco14 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Hehe, you're welcome. :D

D: You cruel thing.
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PoynterJones Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2011
:D

Now, now.. There's a possibility that he might not die as well!
Just because I'm not saying anything doesn't necessarily point towards the fact that he will die :P

*cackles*
I love being the storymaster..
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doldendraco14 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes, I know... But you're still cruel for not telling me! :(

XD We can play God for a while.
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vhowardson444 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2011  Student Writer
I really can't wait this is nice. I hope it's abit longer then 10 chapters. Sorry i'm abit of a long story reader @_@. Just a small hope
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PoynterJones Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2011
:D
Don't worry, It'll definitely be longer than ten chapters. I don't really think that I can conclude the entire story in the next four parts xD
My stories tend to go on for ages :P <3
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vhowardson444 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2011  Student Writer
YES! ^_^ * Happy sebby *
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PoynterJones Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2011
Hehe, very happy :D
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Meggyr1991 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2011
I absolutely adore this story. Your writing style is just lovely. I really enjoyed reading. Looking forward to the next chapter! Good Luck :3
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PoynterJones Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2011
Thank you so much! ^_^
And thank you for all those favourites! ^_^
I'll try not to take too long in posting the next part :D <3
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